AUDIENCE FEEDBACK FROM TEACHER (PLANNING)

I met my new teacher this week, we discussed my coursework and she gave the following feedback:

- The narrative is not easy to follow.
- There is no actual concept that our video is based upon.
- Our video does not contain many conventions.
- It did not capture and hold the attention of the viewer.
- Editing techniques were poorly executed.
- Film more with the actors in it.

Therefore, I will change/do the following things to improve my work:
                                                                                by 23/01/15

-complete new timeline and shotlist
-  Include more angles and shots in sequences to make the narrative clear. 
- Get rid of the conceptual element to the video.
- Research conventions to gain a better understanding of generic conventions, then include these.
- Ensure it is clearer and moves at a faster pace so the audience can follow the narrative and be interested in it.
- Watch editing tutorials to correctly edit certain shots.

- Use actors that can be easily contacted and filmed with.

SHOT LIST (PLANNING)

SHOT LIST

1. Train Journey - medium close up
2. Channel Changes (TV Remote) - close up
3. Breakfast in Bed - high angle medium shot
4. Friends left behind - wide shot
5. Apologies (flowers) - wide shot
6. Texts - close up
7. Parties - medium long shot
8. After parties - two shot
9. secrets told - medium close up
10. Pints - birds eye view
11. Meals out - over the shoulder shot
12. Dishes instagrammed - over the shoulder
13. Babies swerved - birds eye view
14. Romantic dinners - wide shot
15. Scores settled - close up
16. Anniversaries - medium close up
17. Spontaneous weekends - two shot
18. Wrong directions - medium shot
19. Tattoos - high angle medium close up
20. Years of relationship - long shot
21. Houses - wide shot (establishing)
22. Minutes together - close up
23. Trips - medium shot
24. Books unread - high angle wide shot
25. Films unfinished - longshot
26. Gigs - wide shot
27. Calls - two shot (split)
28. Goals (fifa) - medium close up/ over the shoulder shoulder
29. Animals - high angle wide shot
30. Birthdays (cakes and candles) - birds eye view
31. Nights alone - birds eye view
32. Movies watched - two shot
33. Miles walked - two shot/wide shot
34. Sweet temptations - wide shot
35. Kisses - Close up
36. Cigarettes - over the shoulder
37. Lost tents - wide shot
38. Bottles of wine - birds eye shot
39. Morning afters - medium close up
40. Fights - two shot
41. Hangovers - high angle medium shot
42. Wasted hours (Phones) - over the shoulder
43. Lessons learnt (sick) - over the shoulder/ birds eye view

INITIAL IDEAS (PLANNING)

TARGET AUDIENCE (RESEARCH)